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High-res My wife and I went to Hawaii for a long week back between drafts of The Bubble Gum Thief. I lugged a heavy collection of Raymond Chandler books around the islands; as a result, Chandler’s writing will always sound like crashing ocean waves to me.   Above, you’ll find the first page of The Long Goodbye.  Look at the first sentence … two lines of text and not a single comma.  It just flows. Look at the second sentence of the second paragraph.  It’s a mile too long, but it doesn’t matter because it’s perfectly natural.  The problem with a run-on sentence isn’t its length; it’s that the reader has to stumble through it.  There’s no stumbling here.   Consider:  ”[H]e looked like any other nice guy in a dinner jacket who had been spending too much money in a joint that exists for that purpose and for no other.”  If that doesn’t sing to you, maybe it’s because we take this for granted now; Rubber Soul doesn’t sound ground-breaking to the kids today either.   I love everything about Chandler’s voice.  It’s not mine, but it gave me the courage to find the one that is. 

My wife and I went to Hawaii for a long week back between drafts of The Bubble Gum Thief. I lugged a heavy collection of Raymond Chandler books around the islands; as a result, Chandler’s writing will always sound like crashing ocean waves to me.  

Above, you’ll find the first page of The Long Goodbye.  Look at the first sentence … two lines of text and not a single comma.  It just flows. Look at the second sentence of the second paragraph.  It’s a mile too long, but it doesn’t matter because it’s perfectly natural.  The problem with a run-on sentence isn’t its length; it’s that the reader has to stumble through it.  There’s no stumbling here.  

Consider:  ”[H]e looked like any other nice guy in a dinner jacket who had been spending too much money in a joint that exists for that purpose and for no other.”  If that doesn’t sing to you, maybe it’s because we take this for granted now; Rubber Soul doesn’t sound ground-breaking to the kids today either.  

I love everything about Chandler’s voice.  It’s not mine, but it gave me the courage to find the one that is. 

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